MICROCOSM
By Peter Woodgate
Barry studied the moon. It was in the third quarter, partially lit by
the sun, it’s craters were highlighted magnificently by the shadows that swept
across its surface.
How vast was The Universe? And was there an end to it? How small was the
tiniest particle and could we know there was not something even smaller? He
thought back to when the tiny atom was assumed to be the smallest particle and,
when this was subsequently split, the chaos it caused. Barry then thought about
subatomic particles, the nucleus and the electrons and how that made up a tiny
solar system of its own then, deciding it was becoming incomprehensible. He moved the telescope 70 degrees to the left
to study some stars in the Milky Way.
Browsing through this sector,
Barry paused as the star Betelgeuse came into view. “That’s odd,” he thought,
as he drew back from the eyepiece and rubbed his eye, “must be something on the
lenses. He carried out an auto-clean of the lenses that formed part of the
giant mirror telescope and took another look through the eyepiece. It was still
there, a big red glow just to the left of Betelgeuse.
Barry turned to his wife
Angela who was busy on the spectrometer. “Come and have a look at this Darling,”
he shouted excitedly, “there is something really strange here.”
Angela sighed, stopped what she was doing and sidled over to where Barry
was, once again, peering through the giant scope.
“I hope this is not one of your ploys to get me over for a cuddle,”
Angela laughed as she stroked the back of Barry’s neck, “after all,” she
continued playfully, “you are a married man.”
Angela and Barry were both
astrophysicists and, since marrying two years previously had decided,
literally, to spend the rest of their lives together. It was for this reason
they had volunteered to work together at the isolated observatory on the summit
of Mount McKinley .
The work was often tedious and boring but they managed to spice things
up a bit by pretending they were illicit lovers.
“No Darling,” Barry remarked, “I’m
serious, have a look at this.” He stepped aside to allow Angela to look through
the eyepiece.
“What am I looking for exactly?” queried Angela.
“Look to the left of Betelgeuse,” replied Barry, “what do you see?”
“Looks like a red smudge,” Angela hesitated, “perhaps there is something
on the lens.
“No there isn’t Ange, I’ve had them auto-cleaned, and that red mist or
whatever is definitely cosmic.
Angela stepped back from the eyepiece, “how long has it been there? The
Astronomical Federation will have to be informed.”
“I carried out a full survey on this quadrant three days ago,” Barry
replied, “it certainly wasn’t visible then. I will send a report to them
straight away.
Barry forwarded all the data
and awaited the reply. It didn’t take long and he read it to Angela. “It seems
they will be making an independent investigation but want us to continue
monitoring the situation.”
“What do you think?” Angela asked anxiously as she gave Barry a hug, “is
it anything serious?”
“I don’t know,” Barry spoke softly, “but we will need to monitor this
continually.” Angela sighed disappointedly as she made her way to the kitchen
to fetch refreshments. She hated sleeping alone and was not looking forward to
the sessions that lay before them. Angela returned shortly after with a meal
courtesy of the auto chef and sat down opposite Barry.
“It’s going to be awfully lonely,” she looked at Barry with sadness in
her eyes; Barry shook his head, “sorry darling there’s not much else we can do,
hopefully, it won’t be for long.”
The next few days were rather
traumatic as they slept and observed in eight-hour shifts sharing only the
occasional meal together. Earth’s Astronomical Federation had sent a couple of
messages through saying that they believed it to be a distant Supernova which
would dissipate in time. Barry, however, was not convinced. Not only was it
spreading in all directions, it appeared to be heating up the atmosphere at an
alarming rate. The external thermometer had shown a rise in temperature of two
degrees in three days. He knew that this could not be normal as at this time of
the year it should be decreasing.
It was at their next meal
together that Barry looked at Angela and whispered, “you do know that I will
always love you Darling, don’t you?”
“Of course I do,” replied Angela, “what’s brought this on?” she sighed
as she gave Barry a big hug. “I think we are going to face Armageddon darling,
that red mist or whatever will swallow us up. It’s getting larger and hotter by
the day.” Angela did not say anything; she just looked at Barry with a tear in
her eye.
It was another three days
before the Federation of Astronomical Affairs acknowledged that a problem
existed. Unfortunately, it was now far too late for any evacuation from Earth.
The red cloud had, by now, swallowed up Betelgeuse and the rest of the
stars in that quadrant and calculations had revealed their own Solar System
would be obliterated within a week.
They would, of course, die of oxygen starvation before being vaporized.
Barry and Angela lay on their
bed naked, their arms around each other. Their mouths were open but no
breathing was heard, their eyes wide and staring saw nothing.
Their faces were the last thing each had seen before darkness overcame
them and were now oblivious to the fiery blast that swept their planet and
everything on it into eternity.
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God looked at the charred remains of the galaxy he had just destroyed
and shook his head.
“I had great expectations for this creation,” his voice thundered with
minatory authority.
“Why oh why had mankind defied and ignored what I had placed in front of
them?”
“Why had they fragmented my laws with individual autonomy and taken my
name in vain?”
“They gave me no choice; I had to end it before they destroyed
themselves.”
God reached out and discarded the charred remnants of the Milky Way
leaving a miasmatic vapour in its place. Then, turning his attention to the
Horsehead nebula, where he commenced his next creation.
“It should only take a few billion years,” he muttered to his son who
was seated by his side, “so prepare yourself.”
God’s son did not reply but took note of the destination of his next
assignment, thinking,
“I hope my father's next creation is not made in his own image.”
Copyright Peter Woodgate
I liked this very much indeed and it was perfectly ended by the wry remark at the end!
ReplyDeleteTalking of adverbs (perfectly), a good exercise is to go through your work and eliminate all (or most) adverbs. Think you will find it reads much more smoothly and sounds more professional. The same thing goes for adjectives, by the way.
Also don't and can't and words like that sound more natural than do not and can not etc.
Also there is repetition of 'continuous monitoring' in this piece and I think one needs to be cut out.
Hope you don't mind me mentioning these quibbles because otherwise I think it is a very good story.
Stay safe.
Thank you Janet,I hold my hands up to that.It takes me back to my poetry course where my tutor was always reminding me "you must be prepared to murder your Darlings" "less can be more" Yes I did a quick scan and recognised where unnecessary words were used.will amend my documents copy.I also noticed a few more errors involving a full stop and commas.Thanks for excellent advice. Peter
ReplyDeleteThe elusive god cell. Enjoyed reading this Peter. I was on the lookout for Bruce Willis, thought they might have sent a crew sooner with all these so called alien happenings of late.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed this and liked the unexpected ending.
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