Ode to a Crow
By Dawn Van Win
Oh Mr Crow
We thank
you so
‘Tho much
maligned
(which is
unkind)
Once souls
move on
To life
anew
You
flutter down
And take
your due
Recycling
discarded shells
You keep
life’s cycle
Turning
well
Loved your ode to the crow Dawn. What crow lover wouldn't. Such entertaining birds, full of mischief.
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Hi Dawn, another little beauty.Looks understated but reveals much within a few words.I love the construction of the poem and the coupling of maligned and unkind,inspired.Trying to be helpful I would add one letter and subtract one letter to give you a perfect end-rhyme.Line third from bottom,"Recycling a discarded shell.looking at the third stanza and because you use recycle and cycle,you may think about changing cycle to circuit.I am sure you are aware these are not criticisms, purely advice.Trust you and family are well and safe regards Peter.
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ReplyDeleteLovely poem. I'm a fan of our feathered friends so enjoyed it all the more.
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Liked the crow - words and drawing. Peter's suggestions worth considering. Gather enough of these together, particularly on a rural theme, you could have an illustrated book.
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